Showing posts with label week 9. Show all posts
Showing posts with label week 9. Show all posts

Thursday, October 19, 2017

Week 9 Story: The Eight Porcelain Turtles


In front of Shane sat 8 porcelain turtles. Their perfectly hand sculpted shape, repeated precisely on each shell.

These turtles were a legend. He had hardly believed his partner River when she told him that they were more than myth. One could only imagine his reaction when she told him that they could be stolen.

Each turtle was priceless on it's own, but the whole set could fetch enough to make Shane and River two of the richest people this side of the Mississippi. Shane's hands shook with excitement, the previous two hours of laborious lock picking and deft cutting of wires was behind him and now they were safely away from the crime scene.

"They're beautiful, aren't they?"

The twinge of bitterness in her voice surprised Shane. Shouldn't this be their moment of triumph? What is wrong?

River continued, "Remember, I told you that if you wanted to be a part of this heist then you would have to trust me unconditionally?"

"Yeah, what about it?"

Shane's voice betrayed doubt. This isn't like her.

"You need to trust me now, Shane. Do you trust me?"

Shane turned to River. He didn't like to make promises without eye contact. They felt less sincere.

"Of course I trust you, now what is it?"

"We need to crack open these turtles."

There was a ring to the end of the word. the room echoed her like it understood the weight her words implied. Shane would have none of this.

"Are you insane? These are worth a fortune. It'd be like burning a billion dollars!"

"Shane..."

"Why in the world would we destroy them?"

"I can't tell you Shane."

Shane stepped back in shock. River must have lost her mind.

She continued, "If you won't then I have to myself and you can walk out that door."

"Who's to say I'd leave without my share?"

River pulls up her hand. Shane can see a gun that was previously concealed. Keeping a sharp eye on Shane, River reaches over and grabs the first turtle.

"You should have just trusted me."

River slams it on the table's corner. It cracks. The pieces fall to the ground, echoing a finality.

River's eyes never leave Shane as he says, "River, let's talk this out."

Crack.

River's eyes squint as she breaks a third turtle.

And a fourth.

And a fifth.

And a sixth.

Shane is powerless, there is nothing he can do as he watches his dreams of wealth crash before his eyes.

And a seventh.

River pauses with the last turtle in hand. She looks to Shane and says, "I do not take kindly to those who can't obey orders."

The last turtle cracks. Instead of shards of porcelain falling to the ground however, a shimmering streak can be seen beneath the surface of the porcelain.

"Is that..." Shane can't finish the sentence. he is awestruck at the gem that has been revealed.

"Yes it is. In my hand I hold the most valuable diamond in the world. It is worth more than most of the countries on this planet. It's a shame, you could have had a piece of this but you doubted me and now you get a different kind of reward."

The trigger on her gun cocks.

Bang.



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Author's notes: I based this story loosely on the story of King Shantanu and his wife Ganga. More info can be found in my story plan from a couple weeks back, but the parallels are rather obvious. I decided to change the relationship between the characters and the premise because I wanted to take the concept of trust inherent in the original and put into a new story.

Wednesday, October 18, 2017

Reading notes: Epified Mahabharata part A




The Epified Mahabharata:
I can already tell it's going to be easier to keep track of characters because of the images.


I also really like the narrator's voice. Both the girl and guy have a very clear reading voice. I also like how there is explanation beyond just the story telling.

The way they told the story of Shantanu and Ganga plays out much better not knowing why Ganga is killing the children first.

The entire story literaly kicks off because King Shantanu couldn't get over a girl he met. A lot of people die because of this... Rewatching the story i have a much clearer view of this.

The whole choosing his moment of death thing doesn't really come full circle very well.

He who was formerly known as Deravrat still seems a bit overly obsessed with his father in this version too, but that may just be a cultural thing.

The story so far section is going to be a life saver for me.

Amba really does deserve the revenger she will eventually exact, I kinds forgot about that.

Some of these stories such as Satyavati's son growing up instantly don't get any less ridiculous in this form.

Vyasa couldn't have... I don't know, taken a shower?

There are far fewer stories in these video playlists, so it's harder to take alot of notes. I do really like these compared to the reading, it is still hard to keep all the characters in mind, but between the images and the "last time on"s it makes it a lot easier.

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Tuesday, October 17, 2017

Reading Notes: Mahabharata part D


The Mahabharata part D:

The character of Amba brings this up specifically, but i love how often these epics will bring back a character we saw earlier on and then just sorta forgot about. It makes the world of the story feel so much more real and lived in to me. This works really well for storytelling in print form also because of the ease at which someone can look back to recall who that character is.

"Shit hits the fan" would be a good way to describe the events that are now unfolding. i know they have been building up for many chapters now, but it is still shocking to see characters dying so rapidly.

The story really is hammering in how the enemy should be rooted against. Their trickery is clearly seen as a bad thing.

I will however admit that the "the elephant" technicality on the man who can not lie is kinda hilarious.

I am actually having a bit of trouble remembering which character is on which side to be honest. I should have made a little check sheet or something, definitely will during my next version of this reading.

This set of chapters is sad...

I get that Brishma gets to choose his own death date, but I didn't consider that he could be... incapacitated in other ways so that he couldn't battle. I kinda assumed he'd be fighting right up until he decided to die.

As shown by the horse rituals I appreciate how some parts of these stories are meant to teach the young children their cultural rituals and what not in a way that is more engaging to them.